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An outline of this idea:
An amusingly unstable thief, who truly doesn't care about much at all except stealing, was once pulling a heist that went sour. It went sour for one very simple reason – the guy who set it up didn't like him very much. Our beloved thief joins us, where he escapes from a distant prison and disappears for some time. Upon his return, he shows back up at the very man’s home who ruined his career. He feigns forgiveness and kindness. Working back up the scales as a thief and trying to get his old position back, our thief must deal with unsavory characters, unsavory situations, and unsavory foods. But once he returns to where he began, shall he execute his master heist, or his back-stabbing boss? 
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This is an older piece. Actually, it's at least a year old, if not more...you can probably tell by the writing. I feel like it's a bit less well done, but at the same time, I was fairly proud of it back then. Anywho, thought I'd share as it's been a few weeks since my last post!

Hope you enjoy, and as always...
Cheers!!!
~Rayen

Art Credit - "A Mall from Out of this World" by Tryingtofly 
Linky Link - A mall from out of this world
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:iconsekero007:
sekero007 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2015
It looks like one of the cities in mass effect
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VSIS Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
...why not both?
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry, both what?
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VSIS Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015
*both plans.
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:iconrayen-v-storme:
Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Ahh, I see now! I like how you think! But alas...spoilers ^.~
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VSIS Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015
ikik ^-^
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The13thInfantry Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I liked it.  You had a good use of imagery and descriptive detail.  I felt the main character was an easy role to assume.
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Glad you enjoyed.
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:iconthe13thinfantry:
The13thInfantry Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you for posting it.  If you get the chance check out my story "The 13th Infantry" in the science fiction and mystery section.
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Sure, I'd love to! Could you please shoot me the link though? My laptop is a bit figgidty atm.
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The13thInfantry Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
See if this link will work. Sorry it took me awhile to reply, but I was busy.
the13thinfantry.deviantart.com…
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apierce100 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2015  Professional Traditional Artist
This piece is really appealing. Draws you in and makes you want to explore. You've done an amazing job creating atmosphere and depth. Kick ass!
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks mate!! I appreciate it ^.^
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:iconjonup:
Jonup Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015  Student Digital Artist
epic
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:iconrayen-v-storme:
Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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newciv1 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Evil Malicious mcBadguy III, the duke of Evil town.
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Now that's a title he hasn't heard in a long time ^.~
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newciv1 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
^-^ Would his son be Villan Mal McBaguy, duke of all things evil and melicious?
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:iconrayen-v-storme:
Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
But of course!
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Undomiel321 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Fun, fun, fun!! I like this story too, although I hope you are working on the other one. I love it when your main characters are so sarcastic. :heart:
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, yup! This is an oldie I wanted to upload just for fun! And haha, I'm glad you like them! Thanks ^.^
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Undomiel321 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome!
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GameFreak44-Weee Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Holy Shit! Nuu
You should work for Science fiction films!
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Hahahaha, thanks mate. Much appreciated!
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ChiouRin Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2015
I love this! Please continue.
I don't know what it is that makes me want to read more, but there is certainly something! (maybe it's the unstable and disinterested part, those always fascinate me...) Let's not think about what that says about me xD

Anyway, do you plan on writing more about this? Or was it just something you wnated to show people?
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha, I personally love writing those characters. They just flow out so...easily...and...fun-ly XD
So yeah, I think we're in the same boat!!!

And well, originally I wanted to turn this into a short story arc about a year ago. Then I promptly forgot about it....and remembered like well, yesterday XD So I really don't know. I can't even remember the original direction I was taking....

I do have to apologize....I'm so scatterbrained with my writing. I rarely finish a full story. "Silent City" was one of the few, and that's not even the full thing!!! I had dreams that extened waaaaay past just three sections.
So it goes....
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ChiouRin Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2015
Then please keep writing them! :D
And as I said, I would love to read more! Even if it's a new direction ^.~

My problem with stories is, that I never have an end for them. They lack the direction that I would need to continue writing them... I hate that...
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, I'll try ^.~
And we'll see what happens, yea? Sometimes we go somewhere we never even imagined...

Hey, well at least then, you've got a never ending tale to entertain yourself with, yea? Look at like....a potentially everlasting daydream!
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ChiouRin Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015
Great! ^.^

Well, yes, but at some point they always kind of fade out and there is just nothing more that could happen...
And that's when my mind starts the next random scenario that goes on until it starts to fade. I actually spin those tale right before falling asleep, a litlle like a bed time story ^.~ and then, one day it's just gone and I can't even remember what it was about -.-
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I apologize for the long delay. Things have been a bit crazy, and I hate giving some "meh" response so I always say I'll do it later and when later arrives, it's been nearly a month O.O
My bad on that.

I see what you mean though! And I'd imagine that as a writer, that'd get fairly irritating. But on the super bright side, that just means you're excellent at creating these stories and adventures, which is a gift in itself!
As for the fade...yeah. I feel your pain. I had an awesome dream last night, something about diffusing a super deadly explosive and I can't remember anything else. I recall a girl, an explosion, and mountains. And it's driving me crazy that I can't recall the rest.
Rant aside, yes, I do understand XD
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ChiouRin Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2015
Don't worry! It's always great to suddenly get a reply you hadn't even thought about anymore^.^

If only I could bring all those ideas to paper! It is quite frustrating sometimes. Just like those great dreams that you cannot remember afterwards. ;)

maybe I should write them down instead of just letting them play out in my mind... it would be so much easier...
Wasn't it you who wrote a story about someone with a machine that read his mind and wrote the story for him? Until it ended badly...
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Ha, like this one? I don't know what it is, I've just been so dang lazy lately with this site. Not that I don't want to put up more stuff or read more, I've just been...well busy! A million things to do, and I end up forgetting about the fun-er sides of life. Speaking of which, I WILL read all your posts!

I know what you mean!!!! So frustrating. My best advice is always carry a piece of paper or write it down in your cellphone's notepad or something. Just a few lines to keep it in your head!

Hahahahahaha, yes! That was "Raphael's Ruin"! ^.^
The nice thing about sketching down the beginnings of a fresh story, rather than a fully formed one you've lived in your head, is that you won't get bored or lazy with it. The story develops as you write, rather than you rehashing fuzzy memories. That's why I've never finished the Silent City series or the Fairy Tale segments. I kinda...wrote them in my head, and whenever I sit down to write them, I feel like they're drab retellings of far more exciting dreams.

*shrug*
If that makes sense.
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neverdying Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
Outstanding piece! Great scale!
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank ya ^.^
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Newroleplayer Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2015
Sounds like an interesting story. Best of luck writing it:)
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Rayen-V-Storme Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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Newroleplayer Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2015
You're welcome.
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